Entry 8: Literary Essay

Essay on Sexual Minorities in Music Scene of 70's and 80's from ALEX CARSON

IMPROVE WRITING ASSIGNMENT

THESIS:

It is focused and it is not broad. I narrowed my argument and made it specific to the "music as was the artistic form of LGBTQ minority that served as a shelter for gay minority. I focused on homosexual groups and not any other group; and music as form of art, not any other type of art. etc.

Modified Thesis: 

     "Music in the 70's and 80's was the artistic form of the homosexual minority to manifest sexual identification, acceptance, freedom, same love relationship abd strggle"

PARAGRAPH 3:

TOPIC SENTENCE: The topic sentence summarizes the topic that will be discussed and supported in the paragrap; in this case, "gay music anthems as support for gay minorities"

TYPE OF PARAGRAPH: Paragraph by examples

LINKERS: 
Linkers of addition: Besides, in addition,

COHESION: 
Anaphoric References: nouns, whose, it.
Exophoric References: Gloria Gaynor, Village People, The Weather Girls, Diana Ross, AIDS.

COHERENCE:
Topic and Comment: the type of topical progression is hypertopic.

HYPERONYM: Music
HYPONYM: Song, lyrics, Anthem
SYNONYMS: Song and Anthem


PARAGRAPH 4

TOPIC SENTENCE: The topic sentence presents the topic of the paragraph which is "homosexual expression in rock scene"

TYPE OF PARAGRAPH: Paragraph by examples

LINKERS: Additionally

COHESION:
Anaphoric Refernnces: his, both, nouns, which
Exophoric References: Elon John, Lou Reed, Andy Warhol, Sting, Holly Woodlawn, Joe D'allessandro.